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In some countries, young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and starting university. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of taking a gap year before starting university

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The supplied line graphs highlight the information with regard to the number of people in units of thousands, who move into and out of the United Kingdom throughout the
period
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 from 1993 to 2002. At the beginning of the research, figures on emigrants and immigrants are composed of 275
thousand
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 and 250
thousand
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 respectively. According to the graph, we can observe that the number of emigrants rose inconsiderable to 300
thousand
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 by the year 1994 and remained to be stable during the research
period
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 from 1994 to 1997.
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, a more detailed look at the chart affords to infer that after 1997 the total inflow
migration
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 has spiked to 500
thousand
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 by the beginning of the 2000s. Onwards, the figures on
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 a type of
migration
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 do not incur overwhelming changes. At the same survey
period
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, findings on outflow
migration
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 afford to conclude that the number of immigrants does not undergo a tendency.
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, figures have been fluctuating throughout the
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. To summarise on the
second
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 line graph, we can point out the increase of outflow
migration
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 for 9 years. To be more precise, growth was more than 75
thousand
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.
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

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To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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