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In some countries more and more people are becoming interested in finding out bout the history of the house or building they live in. What are the reasons for this? How can people research this?

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In many nations, more and more individuals are staring interestedly in exploring the old
stories
 of the buildings or architectures that they live in. I think the main reasons are based on most
people
 have the natural desire of that keen to know the histories of a place that they living in.
Thus
, I will express the reason that
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from result
this
 phenomenon and the methods that how public do research about it.
Firstly
,
people
 have
the
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 natural desire or attempt to know the histories about the
house
 that they living in. They want to know the old
stories
 of the building to see whether it holds value.
Secondly
,
in addition
, when
people
 purchase a
house
, the traditional culture of the building and the owner’s capacity could make a huge value on it and could be a good investment.
For instance
, Hu Tong is a Chinese traditional architecture
that is
 very expensive. When
people
 attempt to purchase the Hu Tong building, they always want to know the history of
this
house
 and the property owner’s story. Sometimes, the story on the building could have a big return on investment. Regarding the methods of research the information of a
house
, there are amount of ways that on doing it nowadays.
For example
, in Japan, the suicide rate is significantly high. Some
people
 ended their life in their apartments.
Therefore
, in Japan, before registering into a
house
, everyone can check the
house
 situation with the intermedium agent or online website to ensure the security of the
house
. In conclusion,
people
 have the natural desire to
seeking
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 to knock down the information and old traditional
stories
 of the building that they spent time with.
Furthermore
, sometimes property owners’
stories
 and status could make the
house
 valuable and good for investment.
On the other hand
, the methods of research the information of a
house
 are getting extremely convenient in recent years with the development of the internet.
People
 could get
the
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 number of details from the website.
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