Also it is widdely recognized that cars damage the environment, their manufacture and use to increase. why is this the case? how could this increase be controlled?

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hardness
harness
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the probable reasons
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case and the solutions that we can implement for
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controlling
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and
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are
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important
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down,thousands of
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their jobs.
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industry
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industries
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provide huge
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incomes
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.
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, they help to
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of their country.
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,
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prefer to
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their own car because they believe their
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are more
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comfortable
and efficient rather than other
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forms
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,
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cars
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are
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private vehicles and
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can use them any
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hour
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the opposite, public transportation
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full of
people
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most of the time and they have
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scheduled
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. There are some strategies that could be implemented to try
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issue.
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should improve the system of public transportation by increasing the number of vehicles and expanding their time working.
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, automobile companies should produce
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cars
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which
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consume
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fuels
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.
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the help of social media
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should encourage
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to use less of their
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and mention the
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environmental
problems that would be happened because of
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global carelessness. To conclude,
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and
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Petroleum
industries
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cannot
shutt
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shut
down and we must implement some strategies to help both
people
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and
industries
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become more eco-friendly.
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