Some people encourage young children to leave their parents house as soon as they become adults while other say children should stay at their parents house as long as possible. Discuss both the views and give your opinion.
Some individuals may believe that leaving their
parents
house
as soon as possible can be the best option, however
some people believe that children should stay Add a comma
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with
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their
parents
for a long time as they need. This
essay will discuss young adults
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for a longer time and also
about teen leaving their parents
house
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views
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young children can become lazy, Add the comma(s)
,however
in
the other hand teenagers who leave their Change preposition
on
parents
house
early can struggle with money
.
Society
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also
belivies
that if the individual Correct your spelling
believes
do
not struggle they can not get out of their Change the verb form
does
conforty
zone.
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comfort
conformity
young
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of young
adult
decided to leave alone because of many reasons some do not have Fix the agreement mistake
adults
good
relationship with their Add an article
a good
parents
or they want there
own privacy, despite that can bring some disadvantages with, for Correct your spelling
their
exemplo
; those Correct your spelling
example
teenages
can struggle with Correct your spelling
teenagers
money
and may have to accept any type of job. In addition
, not having money
ennougth
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enough
this
adults
can't afford to pay for your education. However
leaving with their parents
can come advantages this
teenages
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teenagers
teenage
money
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much
also
those individual
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that individual
those individuals
lot
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money
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lazy because Change the verb form
become
they
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their
parents
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their kids Change the verb form
want
focus
just Add the particle
to focus
in
their education.
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on
believe
that Change the verb form
believes
adults
leave with theyr
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their
they're
parents
they will became
lazy. Young Change the verb form
become
adults
tend to chooce
leave with their Correct your spelling
choose
parents
,
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save
money
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their studies, but some individual Change preposition
on
prefer
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prefers
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