Some people encourage young children to leave their parents house as soon as they become adults while other say children should stay at their parents house as long as possible. Discuss both the views and give your opinion.

Some individuals may believe that leaving their
parents
house
as soon as possible can be the best option,
however
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some people believe that children should stay
in
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the
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parents
for a long time as they need.
This
essay will discuss  young
adults
who choose to leave with their parent's
house
for a longer time and
also
about teen leaving their
parents
house
as soon as they can. In my ,opinion both
view
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can be beneficial,
however
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young children can become lazy,
in
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the other hand teenagers who leave their
parents
house
early can struggle with
money
.
Society
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also
belivies
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believes
that if the individual
do
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not struggle they can not get out of their
conforty
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comfort
conformity
zone.   Currently, a lot
young
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adult
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adults
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decided to leave alone because of many reasons some do not have
good
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relationship with their
parents
or they want
there
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their
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own privacy, despite that can bring some disadvantages with, for
exemplo
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example
; those
teenages
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teenagers
can struggle with
money
and may have to accept any type of job.
In addition
, not having
money
ennougth
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enough
this
adults
can't afford to pay for your education.
However
leaving with their
parents
can come advantages
this
teenages
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teenagers
teenage
done have to worry about
money
as
mush
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much
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as if they have to pay for rent, food and other responsibility's and
also
those individual
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can wait for best jobs opportunities. Choose leave with their family can help to save a
lot
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money
with can help to pay for education in the future,
however
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some individuals may
became
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lazy because
they
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their
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parents
wants
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want
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their kids
focus
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just
in
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their education. In conclusion, the old generation
believe
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that
adults
leave with
theyr
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their
they're
parents
they will
became
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lazy. Young
adults
tend to
chooce
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choose
leave with their
parents
,
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because they can
safe
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save
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money
and
also
jus focus
in
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their studies, but some individual
prefer
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their privacy.
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