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Today’s schools should teach their students how to survive financially in the world today. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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In schools, students learn to analyse literature, calculate using trigonometry and understand how photosynthesis works, but often admission are inexperienced and helpless after graduation when encountering the real world. It is
therefore
 argued that academy should teach their admission how to survive financially in the world.
This
 topic is difficult though. Many educators believe that a school is supposed to teach enlistment subjects that they will most probably not encounter again post-graduation
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 so that teachers can develop open-minded and well-informed individuals. At the same time, it can be argued that schools should impart skills that would be applicable in everyday life. Mathematics,
for example
, is supposed to not only communicate actual mathematics skills
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 but
also
 teach logic to recruitment.
However
, institutions are supposed to prepare the youths for their lives following high school.Currently,
this
 goal is not fully met, as often recruitment are unable to handle their finances sensibly and
therefore
 can often face significant problems. an academy that teaches enrollment how to survive financially could change
this
.
This
 significant shift in the ideology of education is unlikely to take place soon, as the education system has been in place for too long to be easily changed.
Also
, a change of
this
 scale would be costly, as teachers would have to be trained and a syllabus for
this
 potential subject would have to be created.
However
, in some countries, for ,example Germany, a community subject is available in which politics and finances are discussed.
This
 leaves admission from Germany in a better situation to deal with finances in their lives. In conclusion, training school enlistment in financial matters would be very useful as the entire community would benefit from students being better prepared for adult life.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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