It is important for children to learn the difference between right and wrong at early stage. Punishment is necessary to help them learn the difference. To what extent do you agree or disagree

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I do agree with using the different ways to learn the children
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& reward,
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of learning with young kids play's an important role in the developing of kids for their function of improving the personality and character.
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, the type of
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must be according to the type of mistakes
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as low marks in exam or small triple in school or little problems in the home as well.
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, physical
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should be not used at all in any situation,it does not matter how the mistake big,we just use the other and the right
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with them is called the discussion ((dialogue))
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: If we gose directly the hard
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, and we are supposed to solve the problem in a short and fast
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as stop sending them to school or meet own friends or watching favourite shows as well, as I believe and my experience, they will do the negative action with us like run away from home or hurt themself or any other bad
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or anything to vent about their refusal to punish. In
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case, we need to be relaxed,come down and try to solve the problem as soon as possible, and if we cannot fix it by ourselves we can go to a specialist person to get advice, that will be great. in nutshell, there is no doubt that the right solution in a bad situation will be a great idea. and let the children participate in these conversations to get understand why we do the
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on them.
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