It is generally believed that some people are born with certain talents, for instance for sports and music, and others are not. However, it is sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sports person or musician. Discuss both views and give your opinion

Talents
are largely considered as given things. In regard to
talents
, some
people
argue that
people
are born with certain
talents
while other
people
argue that any child can be taught any abilities. I will examine both views in
this
essay.
First
of all, I'd like to examine the opinion that attaches more importance
on
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education
than on given things. They say
people
would not know if they have some specific
talents
or not
,
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if they were not taught.
In other words
,
education
can bring out students' potentials inside and improve their abilities.
Besides
, anyone could be a musician or an artist if he or she learned how to compose or
to
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draw.
For example
, there are various kinds of
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only in the art field, including modern art which expresses something by lines. In
this
kind of genre,
people
easily find out who is better.
Therefore
,
education
is important because it makes
people
find out their
talents
and there are numerous fields
people
can challenge themselves without some specific
talents
.
On the other hand
, there are other
people
who think
talents
are essential. They say that
talents
are decided by genes, so which
people
have which
talents
might be decided when they were babies.
Also
, they argue that doing better than others are strongly influenced by
talents
, even though
education
could improve
people
'
talents
. Especially, when it comes to the field which is related to prizes,
such
as
athelets
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athletes
, it is good to
people
who have good
talents
take the jobs.
For instance
, it is hardly possible for a student who was taught to swim as a course of school to win the person who
have
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good abilities and learned swimming since long ago.
That is
why
people
think
talents
are given things and they are essential to be a good
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sports man
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. To sum up, there are both opinions about which is more important between
education
andtalents
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and talents
.
Nevertheless
, both
talents
and
education
are important. It seems to me that
talents
are more vital factors than
education
because
talents
can make good results in general.
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  • innate abilities
  • genetic make-up
  • inherent aptitude
  • nurturing environment
  • rigorous training
  • proficient
  • initial advantage
  • consistent practice
  • perseverance
  • quality training
  • prodigies
  • dedication
  • long-term success
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