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Many students are taught to push themselves to try and be better than other students, rather than work together for everyone's benefits. What are the advantages and disadvantages?

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Some teachers teach their
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 to make themselves to be better and much knowledgeable than other
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, while some part of community argue that working together will be more beneficial to the groups and as well as for the individuals.
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 including their advantages and disadvantages. On the one hand, teaching pupils to push only themselves to be better than others have it is enough advantageous
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. Because it is deeply connected with the characters and the level of intelligence of every individual.
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: some sort of children born with the huge amount of intelligence because of their parents and their up bringing styles after birth.
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, they can gain to huge success and will not come across
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 many problems in learning processes compared to other
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. So, if
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 kind of clever
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 work individually on themselves really hard, they can achieve to extremely high results in their lives.
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, working with the whole groups have it is beneficial
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 too. It is especially related to the type of
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 who have issues with acquiring knowledges all the time.
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 kind of
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 who have lack of knowledge and come across problems in learning processes, will get more benefits if they are supported by their classmates during the classes with working together. To sum up, studying separately and learning being in groups have their advantageous and disadvantageous
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 as mentioned. If pupils study individually, they have more potentials to gain to more results.
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, if they work together, all pupils especially coming across difficulties can benefit.
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