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In spite of advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry. Why is this case? What can be done about this problem?

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 for agriculture has advanced significantly, many
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 in several countries around the world still have a problem of poverty. In
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 essay, I will give an explanation of why the statement is true and how to tackle the issue based on my own knowledge. The main reason for hunger around the globe was that farming
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 was only accessible to the wealthier class of citizens.
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, poor
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 could not use that
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 to help them do farming.
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, many farmers in Thailand could not afford the motorized cultivator since it was too expensive compared to their earnings.
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, many of them did not acquire resources
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, in the northeastern part of the country, most farmers had to rent land to do farming as they did not have their own properties.
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 resulted in an increase in their expenses. To tackle the issue, a government could play an important role in helping these
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, poorer citizens should be helped in their financial situations.
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 to say, a government can provide subsidies to
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 to lower their expenses. These could include tax exemption and money provision. Another possible solution is to hand over the
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 and train them to apply it to their practices. By giving them the
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, the farmers can surely have better outcomes. In conclusion, in my opinion, the main reasons that some
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 are still in poverty despite the advances in agriculture
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 include inaccessibility to
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 and a lack of resources. A government could help
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Answer the 'Problem and Solution' topic

Problem-and-solution essays fall naturally into two parts, the first describing and exploring the problem, the second setting out the solution or solutions.

You essay structure should look something like this:

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – Problems
  • Body paragraph 2 – Solutions
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • One of the first problems of the...
  • Another problem that needs to be considered...
  • A possible solution to this problem would be...
  • One immediate practical solution is to...

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • inequality
  • distribution
  • access to resources
  • climate change
  • natural disasters
  • political factors
  • economic factors
  • agricultural practices
  • infrastructure
  • transportation
  • population growth
  • education
  • knowledge
  • food waste
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