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A restaurant has placed an advertisement for waiters and waitresses in your local newspaper. You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. Write a letter to the restaurant, applying for the job. In your letter: oexplain what you are currently doing odescribe your suitability for this area of work osay when you can attend an interview.

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I am writing
this
 to express my interest in the job as a waiter that you advertised in the newspaper “City Newspaper”
last
 week. Having come across your advertisement, I am eager to contribute my skills and enthusiasm to the dynamic team at your restaurant. Currently, I am a student at college and have been working as a waiter in a Karachi restaurant for two years, during
this
 time, I have gained practical
experience
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experiences
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such
 as taking orders, serving food and drinks, and online orders and payments. I have
also
 learned to work in a fast-paced environment, solve customer complaints and prioritise tasks effectively. I am available at your earliest convenience and look forward to the opportunity to discuss how my skills align with the needs of your restaurants. I am available on weekdays after 3 pm. Thank you for considering my application. I look forward to the possibility of contributing to the success of Karachi restaurant and
excited
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 about the prospect of joining your team. Your’s
faithfully
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, Shahid
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task achievement
Consider a clear opening paragraph stating the intention of your letter to apply for the job vacancy, and mentioning how you found out about the job.
coherence and cohesion
Use a variety of sentence structures and transitions to enhance the flow of information and make your paragraphs well-connected and coherent.
coherence and cohesion
Introduce each paragraph with a clear topic sentence that outlines the main idea, ensuring that all subsequent sentences in the paragraph support it.
task achievement
Ensure to provide more details about the timing of your availability for an interview to more carefully address all points of the task.
task achievement
Although you mentioned being a student and having prior work experience, highlighting specific qualities and skills that make you a strong candidate would strengthen your response.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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