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Many people think that zoos, which keep wild animals in a man-made environment should no longer exist in the 21st century. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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All living beings in
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 world are created equally and have their own right to freedom. Many people oppose the idea of keeping wild
animals
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 captivated in an artificial environment and think that the concept of
zoos
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 should be abolished in
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today's
 day and age. In my opinion, I strongly agree with
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 sentiment as it is cruel to keep these creatures entrapped in closed spaces and there are different methods available in the 21st century to study them. In
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 majority of the
animals
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 are living in poor conditions as they do not have enough space to live, compared to their natural habitat where they can move around freely.
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, a tiger in a jungle will use hundreds of acres as his territory,
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 in a man-made enclosure he is hardly able to get an acre for himself. These types of cruel conditions in
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 have a negative effect on the mental and physical health of the
animals
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. Ages ago, due to the lack of technological and scientific advancements, the
existance
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existence
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 was justifiable from a scientific point of view.
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 situation has changed now, as we already have advanced methodologies and instruments at our
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.
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, radar technologies and microchip collars are effectively used to understand and study the
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 of these wild beings without displacing them
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 of their habitats. In the modern
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 we can keep our academic research on the fauna going on without disturbing them. There is no need left for mankind to jail these majestic
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 as it is inhumane and limiting as well as we have other ways to conduct research,
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 eliminating the need for
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Ethical considerations
  • Wildlife conservation
  • Artificial habitats
  • Species preservation
  • Breeding programs
  • Animal welfare
  • Ecological awareness
  • Habitat destruction
  • Captive breeding
  • Educational outreach
  • Physical wellbeing
  • Psychological stress
  • Regulatory compliance
  • Domestication vs. wildness
  • Natural behavior
  • Economic viability
  • Tourist attractions
  • Cultural perspective
  • Public sentiment
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