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In some countries, the average weight of people is increasing and their level of Health and Fitness is decreasing. what do you think are the causes of these problems and what measures should be taken to solve them?

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Child
care
 training is considered an important activity for a parent to develop their skill in giving the best treatment for their
children
. I personally agree with
this
 statement because human's characteristics, mental and physical conditions
is
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 formed since they were in childhood. It is very important to create a human with good character and healthy. In fact, childhood is the best phase to mould all of those criteria.
In addition
, a proper method to take
child
care
 determined the success of the
child
's future.
Parents
 are the closest person to a
child
 that plays an important role in moulding their
child
's future.
Children
 are very tricky, many adults even do not know the reason for a kid's reaction. A wrong response to
children
's brutalism may lead to a snowballed problem. At the same time,
a
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new
parents
 often time do not know the right ways to treat their
children
.
Thus
, training courses may become an answer to
this
 issue. The courses that are created by the expert on
children
's behaviour may help
parents
 to understand more about their
children
 and inform
parents
 of the best way to deal with their
children
.
As a result
, the conflict between
parents
 and their
children
 will be minimized, while the bonding will be strengthened
instead
. In conclusion, a training course on
child
care
 is very important for
parents
 to take. Especially to those who have no experience in parenting at all. Because
,
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 the information and the method taught will help mothers and fathers deal with their kids in a proper manner.
Therefore
, the good character, healthiness both in mental and physic of their
children
 may come
as a result
 of proper
care
 of the
children
 in the future.
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