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today more and more tourists are visiting places where conditions are difficult, such as the sahara desert or the antarctic. what are the benefits and disadvantages for tourists who visit such places?

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Technology has made the lives of human beings so easy and relaxing that they need to find places to have thrill and adventure. Nowadays, people from all over the world visit sites that have harsh weather and living
conditions
 like the Sahara desert or the Antarctic. The biggest advantage of visiting
such
 places is that an individual learns new skills and learns to appreciate how they are actually living, while the problem with
that is
 there is far greater a risk to losing
life
 than adventure.
To begin
 with, the benefits of visiting places with extreme
conditions
 will be discussed in
this
 paragraph.
Firstly
, the most important one is that one learns new skills that train him for making his
life
 easier in even harsh situations,
in other words
,strengthens a person to be strong mentally, physically and emotionally.
Secondly
, it makes the individual appreciate how they lead their
life
 and what environment they are blessed by God, making them enjoy
life
 and even small moments in
life
 to the fullest.
On the contrary
, the disadvantage can be much worse.
Initially
, there is a high risk that a person may not be able to adapt to
such
 adverse climatic
conditions
 that they might end up with a serious injury or may even develop a disease that may stay with them for their entire
life
. Adding to that, there is a chance that due to some calamity or accident somebody may end up extremely injured or dead, recent studies by Disaster Management Canada in
the
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year 2018, concluded that around 45% who died were tourists who went to travel sites with unfavourable
conditions
. To conclude, even though there are benefits to travelling to sites like the Antarctic it is not worth risking a soul for a mere fun time as the same can be experienced in a much safer environment
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