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Universities should accept equal members of male and female students in every subject. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In the contemporary era, examination competition increasing day by day among admission in tertiary institutions. So,
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academy
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 should give equal seats for both genders in their study subjects. In
this
 essay, I disagree with
this
 statement up to some extent.
To begin
 with,
Firstly
, every
universities
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 should accept admission on the basis of their grades because talented pupils get easily seat
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 the best learning institutions as well as show their learning skills.
Secondly
, every
students
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 have their own choice which
want
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 to learn the subject.so, sometimes men are more present in the same class as compared to women.
For instance
, one survey conducted in Chandigarh University noticed that females are more present rather than males in bio class.
Hence
, pupils accepted just on their marks and their learning skills.
On the other hand
, why should obtained equal numbers of individuals in studies subjects
.
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 The main reason is that both genders obtained equal studies opportunities and scholarships which assist
they
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 in making a bright future. In ancient times, females have limited seats for study so nowadays, they should be accepted equally not only in study but
also
 in other fields
such
 as sports and jobs. In the conclusion,
although
 a majority of universities accepted students equally, other requirements are
also
 essential for universities as well as students because they assist to encourage the reputation in society.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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