Task 2: Some people believe that the best way to encourage children that have a healthy diet at school and some people believe that parents should teach them to have a healthy diet. Discuss both views and give your opinion?

Nowadays,maintaining
a
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good
health
become
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challenging.many people follow a variety of rules to acquire fitness like
excercise
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exercise
,diet,gym.but,here,public believe that youngsters should learn how to take diet at school only is the effective method to improve their
health
conditions.while
,
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community argue that
parents
should educate their offsprings to have
a proper
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proper food
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food
.In my opinion,
parents
should take care of their
children
by giving
protein
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food
.
this
essay will discuss
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both points. To embark on,these days,schools
also
providing
food
to their students,so,academy make sure that
food
have
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a good proteins
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good proteins
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.they try to give only nutrient
food
.
therefore
,there is a chance to attain
a
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good
health
.
for instance
,government
oragnasations
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organisations
organizations
supply bread to everyone who
participate
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in their organisations.
therefore
,
government
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should allow nutrients
food
like eggs,fruits,milk. On
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other
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side,some
individual
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consider that,
parents
do not allow their
children
to eat outside
food
like biryani,fast
food
as these are fat foods if we eat these types of
food
there is a chance to become fat.they teach what kind of
food
is better for
health
,
moreover
,they
also
educate what sort of bread is not good for
health
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as a result
they get a little knowledge about
food
.
for example
,
parents
give almond and cashew nuts everyday morning
their
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children
.because,these are rich in proteins.
furthermore
,
patents
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parents
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should encourage
to
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children
to take fruits like apples,grapes.if we eat ample fruits we need not go to
hospital
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. To conclude,without
health
we can not reach our goals.so,we must take care of our
health
by providing good
food
to our own.youngsters are the pillars of our country,
therefore
,
parents
and schools
are encourage
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are encouraging
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them to have a healthy diet.
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