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Nowadays, parents are allowing their children to use tablets and smart phones to enhance learning. Do the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

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Today,
children
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 are being permitted to use electronic devices for the sake of
education
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. It has resulted
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 increased vision problems and reduced physical activity in
children
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.
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this
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 trend is beneficial for better learning; in my opinion, it has
worst
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 repercussions on the
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 and wellbeing of
children
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.
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, its detrimental effects are more significant than its benefits. Parents let their
children
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have technological gadgets for educational purposes. They can learn either by e-reading or through educational games. Reading opens doors for all types of
education
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 and develops a habit of learning.
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, academic games,
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 as word search, not only boost creativity but
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 improve knowledge. Parents want their
children
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 capable to face
challenges
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the challenges
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 of life; so, they allow them to learn through
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smartphones
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smart phones
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smartphones
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 and tablets.
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, excessive use of electronic tools causes
health
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 problems in
children
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. In the present generation, at least one child is seen with the issue of weakness of
eye sight
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eyesight
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.
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, in the past, the incidence of
long sightedness
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 was quite rare in
children
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.
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,
children
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 prefer to spend most of their time in front of screens,
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this
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 leaves very little time for them to play outside. Research has proven,
children
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, these days, are ten times less active physically than their counterparts
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 decades ago.
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, childhood obesity is an emerging problem in modern societies which often leads to serious illnesses -
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, hypertension and diabetes - in
children
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.
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, the use of technological devices has adverse effects on the
health
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 of
children
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. In conclusion, electronic gadgets are a great source of
education
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 for
children
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;
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, they provide
education
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 at the expense of
health
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.
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, their disadvantages outweigh
advantages
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the advantages
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.
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Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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