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Some people think that schools should involve students in school management. Do you agree or disagree with this idea, give reasons and examples supporting your answers.

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There are those who believe that educational institution must include their students in school administration. I strongly affirm
this
 matter. Involving pupils in managing institution have a lot of positive trends.
For example
, we get to know what truly a student need, think, and how we can excel even more. Being involved we can communicate to them smoothly and they can even feel that they have a voice in our academy.
Moreover
, we can build a student-teacher relationship that leads to academic achievements and reduces chronic absenteeism.
In addition
, they become more responsible knowing that they are part of an institutional system where they can learn a lot and use it in the future.
Also
, it helps the student in a way that they can have discounts for those who cannot afford the tuition fee. Helping a student by encouraging them to join would have a positive trend on the campus. In conclusion, it
also
 allows them to help their parents on paying their school fees
that is
 why there are a lot of reasons why students must involve in school management.
That is
 why I do hold on to the same view.
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