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It is better for students to live away from home while studying at univeristy than to live with parents. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#students #home #univeristy #parents
On the one hand, the tendency to be vegetarian we are witnessing today could be caused by a plethora of reasons. At
first
,
such
 restrictions in
intake
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 of meat and fish dishes avert the adverse impact on the environment. Indeed, humans suspend to kill animals and to be
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a hunter
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hunter
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 and,
thus
, save the planet of the extinction process.
Secondly
, vegetarian food exerts a positive effect on body conditions
such
 as blood pressure, the level of cholesterol across the bloodstream.
Hence
,
such
 a lifestyle assist people to feel better and undergo comfort.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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