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The internet provide us with information about life and culture of different countries and some people say it is not necessary to visit these countries to learn about them. To what extend do you agree and disagree with the statement? Give your opinion and relevant example.

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It is true,In today's ,era almost everything is available on the web. users can easily learn anything about different countries from
there
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 native place.
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 strongly concur that it is not necessary to visit any
country
 for
information
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 will try to convey my agreement and disagreement for
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Firstly
, In recent years the
internet
 has been
our
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 important part of our life because it comes with versatile features any individuals can get any
information
 about any particular place,
country
 or
culture
. People before the
internet
 have to travel
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different
diffrent
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 countries to get even basic
information
 but now that
information
 we can easily by just surfing
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 websites
not
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 even only
information
 we can
also
 get real-time photos and videos of the same. Scientists around the globe can do detailed research about historical buildings,
culture
 and cities or languages. it is
also
 very
convinet
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convenient
 for students and
migrents
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migrants
 to get
information
 about countries before they reach there for e.g before
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 came
canada
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Canada
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i
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 have researched basic
information
 about
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a country
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country
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 like food,climate,festivals or famous food dishes.
On the other hand
,
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 think technology comes with drawbacks because of the
internet
 gap between human beings is increasing, people travel less around the world. rather than to visit any particular place they preferred to check on the
internet
 which LEDs to half
information
 or missing ground reality. for ,e.g I recently read on
internet
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 that
canada
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Canada
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 is not good when it comes to
culture
 but after
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 came here
i
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 got to know citizens are more concerned about
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 festivals and
culture
. To summarize
this
, I would say the
internet
 is the best innovation we have ever
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. rather
then
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 visit the
country
 for
information
 we can get
easily
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 on our smartphone within
in
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minutes.but it half
information
 will always be a drawback for users.
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