Some people thinks that government should increase tax on unhealthy food to encourage people to start eating healthy. Do you agree or disagree

In the current society, unhealthy
food
are
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more welcomed among families,
People
are starting to talk about
this
habit
more
offen
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often
. Some
people
think that
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government
goverment
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the goverment
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should increase
tax
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the tax
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on unhealthy
food
to
encourge
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encourage
people
to start eating healthy. In
this
essay, I tend to disagree
this
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opinion.
To begin
with, there are
varities
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varieties
of
food
that
people
can choose,unhealthy
food
,
such
as Pizza, french fries, hamburgers, they are so
decilious
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delicious
deciduous
though it is unhealthy. not
adusing
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abusing
using
eating among families
wont
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' be harmful. Should government just simply increase tax on unhealthy
food
, it absolutely raised up the cost , leading
living
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cost
challenage
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challenge
for some poor families,
that
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which
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is unfair for them.
In addition
, it is
also
about
invidiual's
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individual's
eating
habit
,
For instance
, if some of
people
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the people
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are vegans that they never eat meat nor unhealthy
food
, doesn't mean that they will be
helathy
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healthy
.
However
,
instead
of increasing taxes on
unhealthey
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unhealthy
food
,
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government
goverment
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the goverment
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shall raise
people
's awareness that how important for
people
to eat
healthy
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healthily
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.
For example
,
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government
goverment
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the goverment
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can make some
advertisement
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advertisements
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in public,
such
as
busess
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business
buses
, some banners. or invite famous
people
to make
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a speech
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speech
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speeches
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for influence. which will be much
efficient
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more efficient
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for
people
to change their idea and start to care about their eating
habit
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habits
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. To conclude,
There
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there
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are varieties of methods to teach
people
to eat
healthy
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healthily
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,
bying
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buying
by
increasing taxes on unhealthy definitely not the good way. In my opinion,
government
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the government
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shall put more speeches or
adverstiments
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advertisements
to raise
people
's awareness that how much impact it can be
to
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on
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them if their eating
habit
is healthy.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • unhealthy food
  • junk food
  • calorie-dense
  • taxing
  • incentivize
  • manufacturers
  • prohibitively expensive
  • disproportionately
  • low-income households
  • healthcare costs
  • obesity
  • diet-related diseases
  • punitive measures
  • lifestyle choices
  • government intervention
  • food industry
  • economic impact
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