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An increasing number of professionals, such as doctors and teachers, are leaving their own poorer countries to work in developed countries. What problems does this cause? What solutions can you suggest to deal with this situation?

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In recent years growing number of high demanding jobs specialists
such
 as
doctors
 and
teachers
 are emigrating from non-developed
countries
 to developed
countries
. There is no denying that, if
this
 process immutably continues, the non-developed community will be poorer and their potential of growing prosperity is getting impossible.
However
,
this
 tendency can be addressed by adopting appropriate actions. It is obvious that
doctors
 and
teachers
 are one of the most significant professions in society, indirectly the deficiency of
this
 profession is caused by a shortage of skilled specialists, which could critically affect education and medicine in developing communities. Hereunder, the non-developed community is facing a brain drain which is undoubtedly the primary reason for the lag behind the industrialized country.
On the other hand
, these occupations are the most essential elements of the creation of human capital and if they had gone to developed
countries
, non-developed societies would have never been developed. The solution to brain drain is required a long period of time because these issues are handled several years.
First
 of all, governments need to prepare development planning, but its direct implementation is not enough.
Moreover
, they contribute more investment to improve facilities in schools and hospitals.
Secondly
, to increase wages to encourage
doctors
 and
teachers
.
Last
 but not least to provide a proper environment of merit and make sure promotion is based on skills and experience rather than on bias or personal contacts. An increasing number of
doctors
 and
teachers
 have moved from underdeveloped
countries
 to industrialized ones in recent years. There is no doubting that, if
this
 trend continues unabated, non-developed nations will get poorer and their ability to grow prosperous would become increasingly difficult.
This
 propensity,
however
, may be countered by taking the right steps.
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