some people think that more money should be spent on developing public transportation, others believe that, instead we should spend this money in enhancing the roads Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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As a result
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of developing public transport more than improving the roads, it is uncomfortable to ride on it.
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is partly because shaking in the newest bus or subway
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is not
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a good thing.
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, spending money to improve roads can help
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people
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went to all the
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in
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their cities without any problem with
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.
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, public transport more
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by students and older
people
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, who mostly has
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some diseases.
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, if
people
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had
comfortable
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road, they would
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a chance to read a book or work by something.
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, sitting places in
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transports
also
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must be better.
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, poor
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who cannot afford to buy their own
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will have a more comfortable lifestyle.
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, research shows that poor individuals tend to be more productive when they
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at their work after having a comfortable ride.
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, it sounds logical for countries to
spesifiy
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specify
certain budgets in order to develop the quality of public vehicles. To conclude, comfortable sitting places and enhancing the roads is
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important
at the same time. If
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of the countries will more valuable,
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problem is solved.
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