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Some people believe that dangerous criminals should spend the rest of their lives in prison, while others think that everyone deserves a second chance and that these offenders should be reintegrated into society. What is your opinion?

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Generally speaking, the criminalistic topic has always been in the spotlight of our
society
. Every day we see on the news a wide range of crimes committed around the world, which fact has turned into the biggest concern of
society
. What to do with inmates once their sentence is finished? In front of
this
 dilemma, on one hand, there is an opinion that dangerous criminals should be sentenced to life.
On the other hand
, there is a version of giving a
second
 chance and reintegrating them into
society
. In the following paragraphs, I will discuss both sides of the argument until to draw a conclusion. To start, it is crystal clear why so many
people
 support live sentences. On many occasions it was seen that some dangerous inmates maintain criminal life once being free, it seems that a large sentence does not correct their behaviour and for
this
 reason, civil fear increase between community when there are convicts in liberty. Sticking to the point that many offenders should spend the rest of their lives in prison, that will provide peace in the streets and increase civil protection. Contrary, we should take into account that nobody is born perfect, it is a natural action of human beings to commit mistakes but the most difficult part is to recognize bad actions and forgive
people
 for them.
In other words
, everyone commits mistakes and deserves a
second
 chance, so
people
 should forgive each other and help to integrate ex-convicts into
society
.
Besides
, sometimes jail is not the best option to correct the conduct of inmates, in fact, it was proven that
people
 with little crimes become more criminal because of the rough conditions of the jail. From my point of view, it is difficult to choose a side in regards to
this
 argument. I reckon that each crime should be studied and judged by its seriousness. And
finally
, once freed, ex-prisoners should be tracked and reintegrated into
society
 by governments aids.
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