Buying things on the internet, such as books, air tickets and groceries, is becoming more and more popular. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

Buying things on the
internet
is normal nowadays, people always buy books, air tickets,
clothes
,…on the
internet
. I think there are advantages and disadvantages
about
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buying things on the
internet
. On one hand, it makes our life easier.
For example
, there are many things that are not in your city,If there is no
internet
you can only go to another place to find it.
This
is really a waste of time.
Also
in
China
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it is really hard to buy train tickets during the Chinese new year. Before the
internet
can buy tickets, people have to go to train stations in the early morning to wait for more than 6 hours just to buy a ticket. But now we can get everything by our phone or computer. On another
hand
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there are
also
many disadvantages
about
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internet
shopping. When we buy
clothes
online, they are only pictures u can’t touch
clothes
such
as in the
real life
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, so the quality is unstable. I have a really bad experience buying
clothes
online, the
color
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is very different from the picture.
Internet
shopping brings convenience to our life but there
also
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many
trick
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tricks
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between it.
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  • Prediction or recommendation

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To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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  • Finally
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • convenience
  • time-saving
  • wide selection
  • competitive prices
  • discounts
  • accessibility
  • global marketplace
  • availability
  • fraud
  • scams
  • lack of
  • physical interaction
  • personal experience
  • impersonal
  • customer service
  • delays
  • delivery
  • return process
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