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The growing number of overweight people is putting a strain on the healthcare system in an effort to deal with the health issues involved. Some people think that way to deal with this problem is to introduce more physical education in school. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Whether adding more physical training in a school is a controversial issue today. I completely disagree that it can cope with the issue concerning the increasing overweight population.
First
 of all, I believe that the amount of provided physical training time in educational institutions is sufficient in most
countries
, except for a few
countries
such
 as South Korea. One of the main problems about
this
 is related to the social environment that compels pupils to study immoderately.
For instance
, in the case of South Korea,
although
 their physical education
class
 is very insufficient compared with the most advanced
countries
, many high schools even force them to study in physical training classes as most people believe it is all to obtain good grades to enter high-level universities. We can find
this
 tendency in a large number of
countries
.
Therefore
, to address
this
 problem, we should focus on improving their social environment and educational system, not instituting more physical activities.
Secondly
, it is almost impossible to execute more physical exercises in public educational institutions in most
countries
. We have to consider the balance among classes and between school life and after-school life.
For example
, it can mean that a relatively minor
class
 disappears or the amount of primary
class
 time,
such
 as literature, mathematics, and history, diminishes if the physical education
class
 amount goes up to the point where most people can feel the positive effects.
Hence
, it is nearly impossible and can cause several side effects. Alternatively, it should be a more effective approach that public academies have to compulsorily provide enjoyable and active activities
such
 as club activities. In conclusion, I strongly believe that rising physical education in school is not a practical means to deal with juvenile obesity.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Childhood obesity
  • Healthcare burden
  • Physical education (PE)
  • Healthy habits
  • Dietary education
  • Lifestyle diseases
  • Socio-economic factors
  • Curriculum overload
  • Inclusivity in education
  • Sedentary lifestyle
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