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Some experts believe that it is better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primary school rather than secondary school.Do the advantage of this outweigh the disadvantages?

#experts #children #language #school #advantage #outweigh
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In
this
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 modern era,
children
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 should learn a foreign
language
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 and some professionals believe that it should be started at primary
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instead
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 of secondary
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. I agree that there are more advantages than disadvantages on
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 matter. It is commonly believed that whatever you want to learn, you should begin the learning process as early as possible particularly to learn a
second
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language
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.
Firstly
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, it is because
children
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 can learn and memorise easily upon their studies at that
age
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.
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, if compare with
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 and teens, teens cannot learn as fast as
children
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 do because a mother
language
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 has already been taken place in their brain. Whatever they studied, their brain translates and understands via based on that.
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, the
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 of
children
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 in primary
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 has not many subjects to study compared with secondary
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.
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, it is the best time
to begin
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 the learning process for a foreign
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.
By contrast
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, some people may argue that the
age
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 of
children
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 in primary
school
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 is too young to start to learn a
language
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 and they should be probably begun at secondary
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.
Otherwise
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, it will give more disadvantages than advantages.
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, those people may believe as a disadvantage that education in primary
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 is the foundation of their kids' life so that
school
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 should be taught only related basic core subjects. The
second
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language
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 is not important for
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age
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. To sum up, I support the idea that
to begin
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 learning a
second
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language
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 for
children
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 at primary
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 has more advantages.
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