Some people say that advertising is extremely successful at persuading us to buy things. Other people think that advertising is so common that we no longer pay attention to it. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Advertise has gained immense prevalence over the past few decades by dint of
information
it provides;
however
, some people argue that it is a useful weapon to convince the public to purchase products, while others claim that, it is ignored by the public.
Therefore
,
this
essay will discuss both notions with valid reasons and examples.
To begin
with, why do people buy things from advertisements? The
first
and foremost reason is that advert is a key part of any business. To exemplify my point of view, it provides
information
about products.
moreover
, it increases the choices of individuals,
for example
, if there are no advertisements
then
we cannot come to know about other things.
In addition
,
advertisement
companies
also
indulge the successful person
such
as celebrity, sportsperson and so on., into the
advertisement
, as a consequence, it might be possible that their followers will buy that thing.
On the other hand
, there are few reasons why people do not put emphasis on adverts, the primitive one is that
,
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nowadays companies are not making as much as an attractive
advertisement
as they do in the past, what I mean is that, they do not provide the right
information
about the product. ,
furthermore
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the repetition of ads is rising day by day,
as a result
, civilians of the nation are feeling bored towards it.
For instance
, we often skip the
advertisement
while watching videos on social media platforms
such
as YouTube, Instagram and Facebook as well. In conclusion, after analysing both
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, adverts are providing crucial
information
about products, so I am of opinion that
this
is a positive development.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • persuade
  • promote
  • attract
  • influence
  • impact
  • consumerism
  • commercialism
  • market
  • product
  • brand
  • endorsement
  • manipulative
  • saturated
  • overwhelmed
  • repetitive
  • distracting
  • irrelevant
  • exaggerated
  • misleading
  • desensitized
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