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In some countries, owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people. Why might this be the case? Do you think this is a positive or negative situation?

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Over the years it has been a conspicuous trend of having self-owned houses rather than using temporary abodes. There could be several reasons for
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 and I believe it is extremely positive to have a personal home. There are myriad causes why most people purchase a property. It is a well-known fact to own a residence which naturally brings a feeling of security and comfort. The rationale behind
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 might be that there is no solidity as a person has to move from one place to another after the expiration of the lease contract which is not only an arduous but
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 an expensive task. Another reason would be the residents can easily modify their homes and install many facilities
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 as solar panels on their rooftops to save electricity. From a financial perspective, becoming a homeowner is a great investment. Given the fact that the price soars over time, it will reap benefits in the future.
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, there could be some problems in the case of living in someone’s place.
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, the rental fee might go up annually
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 the circumstances.
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, in the Netherlands, the cost of renting rises yearly in line with the property evaluation done by the local government. The tenants are bound by certain rules, regulations and obligations in the lease agreement.
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, living in a rented area could invade privacy which is frustrating, especially in shared apartments. Walls and doors are not completely soundproof which is one of the negative points of house sharing which normally happens in big European cities. In conclusion, being the owner of a residency is a
positive
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 situation than renting accommodation since it provides more benefits in terms of flexibility, freedom, and finance in the long term.

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coherence cohesion
Strengthen the linkage between points by using more transitional phrases such as 'moreover', 'in addition', or 'consequently'. This will enhance the logical flow and connectivity of your ideas.
task achievement
Include a more thorough discussion of potential counterarguments or alternate perspectives on the benefits of renting. This would add depth to your analysis and improve task response.
task achievement
Provide more specific examples or statistical data to support your points. This will make your arguments more persuasive and grounded in real-world contexts.
coherence cohesion
Your essay has a clear introduction and conclusion, which helps to frame the discussion effectively.
task achievement
Your main points are relevant and well-supported by logical reasoning. The examples you used, such as the situation in the Netherlands, add credibility to your arguments.
task achievement
You successfully addressed all parts of the task, explaining why owning a home is important and giving your opinion on whether it's a positive situation.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • ownership
  • renting
  • importance
  • sense of security
  • stability
  • financial investment
  • asset
  • customize
  • decorate
  • belonging
  • community
  • potential
  • future generations
  • long-term
  • cost advantage
  • control
  • living space
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