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Some people say that protecting the environment is the government’s responsibility. Others believe that every individual should be responsible for it. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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When it comes to preservation, it is true that every individual is responsible for protecting the
environment
. In my opinion, I side with the view that the
government
 should protect the
environment
.
To begin
 with, there are some
people
 who claim that every individual is more responsible for the
environment
 than the
government
. One of the prime reasons for
this
 is most of the
environment
 is contaminated by every individual. More specifically, most
people
 who live in the world use plastic cups, their own car, clear water and so on every single day.
In other words
,
people
 who live in modern society are common to generate pollution.
Therefore
, every individual needs to protect the
environment
 respectively. Despite the points mentioned above, I believe that the
government
 has to be more responsible for the
environment
.
First
 of all,
people
 who live in the country are restricted by the
government
. The
government
 has the right to make a better society, complying with laws that they need.
For example
, when the
government
 needs
people
 to minimize using plastic cups and bags, the
government
 makes a law regarding extra
cost
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 for plastic.
As a result
, the
government
 has a significant influence on the
environment
 and it is easy for
then
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them
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 to control every
individuals
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. In conclusion, even though some
people
 may believe that every individual is responsible for the
environment
, for the reasons mentioned above, I would argue that the
government
 has to control
people
 in the country to protect the
environment
.
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