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Society is based on rules and laws. It could not function if individuals were free to do whatever they wanted to do. To what extent do you agree or not?

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Humankind has long lived in social groups, where there is a legal system to sustain and manage
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society effectively. From my perspective, I strongly
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 that rules and laws are the cornerstones for the civilisation of human beings;
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, the community could only develop in the short run. In essence, laws play a critical role in helping humankind to achieve a safe and sound life. They are enacted based on good deeds to limit the damage from bad people to the whole society. We are per se relying on the legal system to combat substandard things that could ruin the stability of our world.
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, criminals are anti-social groups of people attempting to break the laws and invade others' benefits, which poses a severe threat to the well-being of the community.
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, governments often utilise regulations to address crime-related issues, thereby making a better place for citizens.
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, most rules and regulations are imposed to facilitate human development in the long term. One typical example of
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 is the carbon fees that each enterprise must pay in order to protect the environment.
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 could help raise people's awareness about how important it is to exploit natural resources sustainably.
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 as consumers and citizens. By and large, though freedom is vital to the overall happiness of individuals, it must be legitimate so as to not leave any consequences to the public. Only by doing so could we ensure that our society is a good place to live for generations.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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