Some people think that parents should teach children how to be good members of society. Others, however, believe that school is the place to learn this. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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teach their
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conducting that how to be a good citizen which is accepted by other
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around them. While, some parents fail to teach them,
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they assign these
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for teaching. In the following paragraph, a reason to support my opinion will be discussed. When the
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they have the
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of teaching about living when the
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essential living too. The best thing, which the
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as the other students in the same
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, responsibility is a skill which they can learn in the class by teachers assign homework to them and
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, they can learn about a penalty when they not following a rule which is a regulation in
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. In conclusion, these two methods for learning about the good citizen have benefits in various ways. In my opinion, before the
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for basic teaching, after that, the
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for teaching is not only the family but
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must teach them about the living in the other ways that the
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cannot teach.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • good members of society
  • teach
  • parents
  • schools
  • responsibility
  • values
  • respect
  • empathy
  • responsibility
  • formal education
  • citizenship
  • ethics
  • social responsibility
  • lead by example
  • role models
  • conducive environment
  • extracurricular activities
  • community involvement
  • collaborate
  • holistic approach
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