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As a country devlops, people tend to buy more cars. Do the advantage for the individual outweight the disadvantage for the environment?

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The citizens of developing countries
such
 as India and China have seen an increasing number of
cars
. In some nations the
car
 is not just a transport
media
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, it is
also
 a status symbol,
thus
people
 chose to buy another
car
then
 they have a need for. Having their own
car
 does give benefits for individuals, as it makes them more independent but
this
 move affects nature because a huge amount of carbon dioxide is released. The growth of infrastructure gives advancement to
people
 in many ways. In a country
such
 as
,
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India
people
enjoys
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 the high-speed roadways network through which the distance between major cities become half. As the standard of living is increasing,
people
 tend to buy
cars
 for convenience
also
 they do not need to depend on public transport.
Moreover
, as the country
develop
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majority
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 of
a
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 general population own a
car
 through which they can travel to work on time and
also
 visit places where the public transport is not strongly connected.
For example
- in the ruler areas
connectivety
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connectivity
 of the buses is not great, in
such
 places the private
car
 made life comfortable.
However
, the increasing number of
cars
 on the road is a major concern for air pollution.
Although
,
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 the
goverment
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government
 restrictions on
car
 manufacturing companies have put
restriction
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restrictions
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 on emission through
cars
, it is still the topic of concern. A number of surveys
has
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 shown the results, which explain that carbon dioxide realised through the
cars
 is the top reason for
pulluted
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polluted
 air in major cities.
Furthermore
, The
maintenace
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maintenance
 of the
cars
also
 create dangerous waste,
such
 as
a
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removed oil from the
enigne
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engine
.
This
non decomposable
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 waste is detrimental
for
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the
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living organisms. In
cpnclusion
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conclusion
, The individual owns the
cars
 through which they can independently travel around the area for work, on the other side ejection of the carbon is
also
 need to be noticed. The
cpuntries
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countries
 need to look for ways to reduce the effects caused by
cars
 on the
environmnet
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environment
.
concerdering
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considering
this
, the effects on the environment
is outperform
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 by the ownership of the
car
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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