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Many people prefer to live in their own house, while others are prepared to live in rental properties. Discuss both views, give your own opinion and examples.

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this
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 modern era, some
people
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 choose to live in houses owned by themselves, while there are others who find rental houses more suitable for living. In my opinion, I believe that living in an independent own
house
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 has more benefits than that a rental property.
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 essay will discuss both views in the upcoming paragraphs. On one hand, some individuals find rental houses cheaper than the properties on sale.
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,
people
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 can spend a minimal amount on monthly basis to live in a three-bedroom
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, whereas purchasing the same
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 is way costlier than the rent amount.
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 to that,
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 living in a rental
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 are free to move anywhere and shifting a
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 is not a big deal for them.
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, my cousin Karan had to move to Mumbai because of a job transfer. It was super easy for him to leave the rental
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 as no documentation and aftercare was needed.
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, owning a
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 is prestigious as well as an asset where the
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 can be used not only for living but
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 for monetary benefits. What's more,
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 can live comfortably without any disturbances of shifting and conflicts that happens sometimes between the tenants and landlord. To exemplify, my aunty Kavita suffered from emotional disturbance because her landlord made stringent regulations on tenents and he was an arrogant person. I feel that living in my own
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 gives a sense of content.
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, one can take a loan on own property in case of needful situations like medical emergencies.
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, my uncle Sam took a loan of 50 lakhs for his knee replacement surgery. In conclusion, living in own
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 or rental
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 has its pros and cons.
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, in my opinion, the advantages of owning a
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 are more than a rental
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.
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