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In the future, nobody will buy printed newspapers or books because they will be able to read everything they want online without paying. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement

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Nowadays,technology is increasing by leaps and bounds with a lot of amenities,so many individuals tend to use online websites like the way2news app it enables plenty of information about the outer world by sitting at home,
therefore
 conventional methods
has
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 been deteriorating day by day,
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 some
people
 like to read journals and volumes,
thus
 I completely disaccord with
this
 statement. To embark on,traditional methods will not disappear in the coming days,because older
people
 do not know how to operate the electronic gadgets for acquiring updates.ultimately,they prefer to utilize the facility of newspapers and novels.
moreover
,these avenues ensure
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 of the information with the explanation of images.
additionally
,by reading the rag we can enhance reading as well as writing abilities.
furthermore
,reading
the
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 journal with a cup of coffee is
also
 one type of enjoyment.
finally
,paper is portable,so we can carry
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 one place to another place.
for instance
,in the earlier days,there were no
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online amenities,so they used to use conventional avenues.
moreover
,there is another advantage,
that is
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 compared to electronic gadgets. On
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another
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 hand,these days,the public is habituated to internet apps for updating the local and international news.social media not only affords
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 but
also
 facilitates
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 the data when we want again.
in addition
 to,applications like google and chrome furnish the statistics
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 just one click on it with detailed information.
furthermore
,we can update with news
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 to time without getting late.there are
also
 disadvantages by using the online media continuously,lack of internet access and eye problems.
for example
,according to the world health organisation,many individuals suffer from blurred vision.because the usage of electronic gadgets has been increasing. To conclude,it is our privilege to protect conventional methods from disappearing,
thus
people
 should encourage to
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 of these avenues.some
people
 do not have
a
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a smart phone
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smart phones
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 as well as internet access
then
 there is a chance to read journals and books.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • accessibility
  • convenience
  • cost-effective
  • cultural value
  • sentimental value
  • reliability
  • distracting
  • access to
  • digital devices
  • internet
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