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IN MANY COUNTRIES IT IS NOW ILLEGAL TO ADVERSTISE ALCOHOL DO YOU AGREE OR DISAGREE ?

#countries #adverstise #alcohol
IT is undeniable fact in most
of
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the
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nations displaying liquor is against the law at present which
harmful
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 for physical growth as well as for mental growth.
This
eassy
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essay
easy
 will
further
 elaborate my views IN support of
this
 notion and
thus
 will lead to a logical conclusion . To eliminate the combat of problems. Human kinds
are now easily get
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 through media, advertisements,poster holding and many more.
Alcohol
 becoming the gateway for youngsters toward vanishing their identity and start moving in the direction of
wrong
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 path by and large they catch things easily in the age of between 15-20 which may
be destroy
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thier
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their
 mental and physical health.
For
instance
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 recent survey in Germany and Italy proclaim that there is drastic growth in
youngster
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 of
alcohol
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consuming
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 which increased
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up to
 19% in
past
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 8 months
Thus
, one way is avoiding advertisement lead them to downfall in
percentage
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 of liquor
consumer
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.
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 there are potential ways to
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these problem
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 or
atleast
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at least
 reduce the effects. Administration
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 to
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comply
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 and implement the law that only above the age of 18 can buy
alcohol
 showing their identification card
such
 as driving licence pan card etc. To ensure the buyer is legal to purchase the item .
In
addition
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 companies have to increase the font of
their
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 ingredients which was added to produce their products. So
consumer
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 focus on ingredients and
aware
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 of what he/she is buying
Hence
this
 thing will be successful
adress
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address
 to reduce the
deathrate
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death rate
 due to
alcohol
 . To
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sum up
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 everything that has been stated if media start avoiding the
alcohol
 advertisement and individual is aware of what he/she is buying. So it is my firm conviction there is
prodigious
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 downfall in
mortality
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the mortality
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 rate of
alcohol
consumer
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