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The quality of life in large cities is worsening what could be reasons behind this. What measures can be taken to resolve this problem

#quality #life #cities #measures
It is argued that living
quality
 in big
cities
are
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is
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 worse than in small
cities
. In
this
 essay,
i
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 will explain
about
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apply
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how to increase urban
people
 happiness.
People
 in metropolitan
cities
 are less socialized
each
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with each
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 other than in villages. Humans behaviour is must be well interacted with another
people
 to share their happiness and sadness, and
people
 in who live in
crowed
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crowded
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cities
 have small chances to meet each other because of their job and their
rutinity
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utility
everyday
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.
For example
, communities in
mega
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megacities
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cities
 usually have worked
for
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from
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 8am to 5pm and sometimes got the extra time work, so when they
are went
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 home they got exhausted and do not meet each other.
Thus
,
improve
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 social connection in big
cities
 is one of the
key
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keys
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 to
increase
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increasing
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 life
quality
.
Socialized
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 each other is a key to
incerase
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increase
increased
 life
quality
 for
people
 who live in big
cities
.
People
 who get depressed ,usually in big
cities
 need to share their
problem
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problems
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to
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with
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 someone else. One of the
key
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keys
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 to
solve
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solving
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is
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this is
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 the government must provide facilities for
people
 to meet each other.
For example
 in Singapore, they have many parks in every corner of
neighbourhood
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the neighbourhood
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, it could be a place for
people
meet
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to meet
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 each other and get
refresh
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refreshed
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 from their job.
Thus
,
provide
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providing
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 facilities,
such
 as
park
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parks
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 could
a
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be a
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key answer to
incrase
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increase
quality
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the quality
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 of life for urban
people
. In conclusion, to increase living
quality
 in big
cities
, there must be a place for
people
meet
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to meet
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 each other and get socialized, so they can refresh from their job or
rutinity
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routinely
 that depressed them.
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