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People in big cities are facing many health challenges due to a high level of air pollution. What causes air pollution in big cities? Can you suggest some ways to deal with this situation?

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The two tables and pie chart illustrative how the percentage of research outcomes in New stores in Auckland , New Zealand. In terms of details, males liked the store more than women at 17 and 34 per
cent
 respectively . In restaurants,restaurants the figure was not much different in 25 and 27 per
cent
 and 17 per
cent
 liked the map.
Then
, pattern the highest per
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cent
, compared for the shops and restaurants . At shops dissatisfied double shoppers-20 per
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, compared to just 10% for the method. At the restaurant , 21 per
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 of women were dissatisfied. 18% of male customers in the shops did not comment compared to just 3% of male customers in the restaurant.In females, the rates were between 9 and 20 per
cent
. In the picture, 11% of shoppers did not comment.
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