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We cannot help everyone in the world that needs help, so we should only be concerned with our own communities and countries. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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It is true that we have
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 enough ability to give everyone around the world a hand. I somewhat agree with the viewpoint because there are many
people
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need
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 help
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 us;
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, we cannot ignore the overseas
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 who
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 need others’ help. The main reason why I believe
people
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 should help their
neighborhood
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 or
countries
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 rather than other
countries
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because
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 it is the most direct approach to assist others. The public can give homeless
people
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, stray dogs and alley cats food near their
house
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.
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, teaching children and looking after elderly
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 in rural areas are
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 a good
way
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 to help others.
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, the government promote many schemes that the younger
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students can help
people
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 who live remotely in a systematic way.
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 can significantly narrow the gap between urban cities and rural areas.
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, helping other
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 is
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 a worth thing
need
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 to be deserved. When our government give other
countries
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 some health
resources
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, food
resources
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 and clothes
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 etc. It means our
country
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is prosper
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 so that we can assign
resources
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 to them.
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, it builds the relationship between our
country
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 and other
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.
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, Japan experienced
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 earthquake in 2011, Taiwan was the
first
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country
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, which gave them
a
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big help,
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 as water, food, money. Now, Japan and Taiwan maintain an excellent relationship. In conclusion,
people
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 who need help exist worldwide. Even though
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 other
countries
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 is a friendly thing, I still believe that we need to put more attention on our communities and
country
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.
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