We cannot help everyone in the world that needs help, so we should only be concerned with our own communities and countries. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

It is true that we have
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no
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enough ability to give everyone around the world a hand. I somewhat agree with the viewpoint because there are many
people
need
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help
beside
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us;
however
, we cannot ignore the overseas
people
who
also
need others’ help. The main reason why I believe
people
should help their
neighborhood
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or
countries
rather than other
countries
because
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it is the most direct approach to assist others. The public can give homeless
people
, stray dogs and alley cats food near their
house
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.
In addition
, teaching children and looking after elderly
people
in rural areas are
also
a good
way
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ways
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to help others.
For example
, the government promote many schemes that the younger
and
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students can help
people
who live remotely in a systematic way.
This
can significantly narrow the gap between urban cities and rural areas.
On the other hand
, helping other
countries
is
also
a worth thing
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to be deserved. When our government give other
countries
some health
resources
, food
resources
and clothes
resources
etc. It means our
country
is prosper
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so that we can assign
resources
to them.
Nevertheless
, it builds the relationship between our
country
and other
countries
.
For example
, Japan experienced
huge
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earthquake in 2011, Taiwan was the
first
country
, which gave them
a
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big help,
such
as water, food, money. Now, Japan and Taiwan maintain an excellent relationship. In conclusion,
people
who need help exist worldwide. Even though
help
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other
countries
is a friendly thing, I still believe that we need to put more attention on our communities and
country
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • global interconnectivity
  • international cooperation
  • ethics
  • moral obligation
  • geographical borders
  • diplomatic relations
  • economic stability
  • global security
  • resource allocation
  • expertise
  • international aid
  • dependency and development
  • sustainable solutions
  • local and global initiatives
  • community resilience
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