It is not necessary for people to travel to other places to learn about the culture.We can learn as much as from books, films, and the Internet. To what extent do you agree or disagree.
Over the
last
few decades, ways of learning Linking Words
cultures
have been a subjective matter. Many Use synonyms
people
think that travelling is not the best way when we have books, films and the Use synonyms
internet
, from which we can cut the distances between destinations and learn from home. Capitalize word
Internet
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it can be financially beneficial and Linking Words
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can save time, I partially disagree with Correct pronoun usage
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this
standpoint and think that visiting cultural places is preferable Linking Words
due to
the cultural aspects and the reliability of sources.
On the one hand, there are several factors to underpin the distance learning of culture. First and foremost, not all Linking Words
people
afford to travel thousands of kilometres when they have a chance to just click the internet from their phones and find a myriad of sources. Even the affordable layer of Use synonyms
people
might not want to spend their money on an informative tour. Use synonyms
Instead
, they could buy gadgets with the help of which they will have a chance to watch informative documentaries, and films, or Linking Words
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visit sites with full information.
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In addition
, trips are very time-consuming activities. Linking Words
In other words
, to go to some cultural place in order to learn about them, you need to devote at least 2 weeks only to one place. It is undeniable that the majority of human beings are workers with fixed work hours, and they have only one month of holiday throughout the year. And, of course, they do not want to spend it on trips, Linking Words
and
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apply
instead
, they would get relaxed and refreshed for the upcoming work season.
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On the other hand
, I believe that it will be more beneficial if Linking Words
people
visit destinations in person. In Use synonyms
this
era of technology, internet fraud has become common, and there is no system to filter the information on social media. Books Linking Words
also
can not be credible, as they were written by poets, and books have never been without fiction and make-up. Linking Words
As a result
, disinformation would bring a misunderstanding of the Linking Words
cultures
, which could lead to serious problems. Use synonyms
For
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this
reason, visiting places and learning directly from genuine sources will be better for tourists.
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Moreover
, exchanging tourists would enhance a bond and a friendship among Linking Words
cultures
. Tourism all over the world and learning from each other Use synonyms
also
has a positive impact on countries' economies, which ultimately affects Linking Words
people
's lifestyles. In Uzbekistan, Use synonyms
for instance
, there are over 150 cultural centres of nations that serve to have a good relationship between Uzbekistan and these countries, making nations closer to each other.
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To conclude
, despite the monetary factor and time that discourage Linking Words
people
from travelling, from my standpoint, visiting places has a profound impact on Use synonyms
cultures
and understanding.Use synonyms
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