Many people argue that zoos where creatures are contained in artificial enclosures should be banned in this century. Are you agree or desagree

Many people argue that zoos
where creatures are contained in artificial enclosures
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should be banned in
this
century.
This
essay totally agrees with
this
statement because it is cruel to keep an animal in a confined space, and nature programs allow us to view animals without the need for a zoo. The
first
reason that animals should not be
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in an artificial and closed building is that it is inherently cruel treatment.
This
is because, when the animal can not live free, in their natural habitat, they suffer and are exposed to several injuries, pain and discomfort, just for the human enjoy.
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, there is evidence that
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living in captivity, suffer serious adaptation issues,
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may suffer depression, may have problems
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, among other problems in their quality of life. The
second
main reason is that we have access to high quality documental and movies in
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and
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,
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, at the comfort of our home, about anything related
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and animal in general. In these programs, people can learn about research on animal habits, their natural environment, how they feed, where they live, even how they died.
For instance
, the BBC recently produced a series called Life in the Undergrowth which allowed us to understand the lives of insects in stunning high definition. In conclusion, it is unnecessary
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confined
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in
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, because
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this
time,
besides
, there are many programs shows to learn about creatures and nature without the need for a zoo.
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