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Some people claim that there are more disadvantages of the car than its advantages. Do you agree or disagree? Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of having a car

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The most common problem in developing countries is traffic
congestion
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. The cause of traffics
congestion
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 are roads development can not keep up with private
car
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ownership
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 and the development of public
transportation
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 is not able to provide large scale services. The number of cars is increasing rapidly every year ,
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 the lengths of the roads are still the same.
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, even in developed countries like America, private
car
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 ownerships lead to traffics
congestion
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 in so many states. Even though the government of America has already built additional lanes or flyovers, they still can not overcome traffic
congestion
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. Americans are still stuck in the traffic that they used to drive daily despite the lane
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 already wide. In my opinion, the
car
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 generates more disadvantages rather than advantages.
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 is, cars produce carbon monoxide
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 dangerous for the environment and human health. Carbon monoxide contains so many pollutants, one of them is lead. Lead can cause a respiratory problem if inhaled excessively.
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,
car
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ownership
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 that can not be managed results in the development of urban sprawl where peoples tend to live far from the city centre. Urban Sprawl will generate high costs for basic utilities
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 as electricity, freshwater installation, and
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 infrastructure.
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, private
car
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ownership
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 will change people's walking habits. Despite the disadvantages of private
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ownership
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, the are several advantages that are still useful for humankind.
Car
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 movement is direct and points to point. It will useful for freights
transportation
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,
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 as finished goods or raw material. in conclusion, the
Car
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 itself will generate more disadvantages rather than its advantages. Government should provide good public
transportation
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 to reduce
car
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ownership
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.
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, the government should restrict
the private cars
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the ownership of the private car
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ownership
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