Some people claim that there are more disadvantages of the car than its advantages. Do you agree or disagree? Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of having a car

The most common problem in developing countries is traffic
congestion
. The cause of traffics
congestion
are roads development can not keep up with private
car
ownership
and the development of public
transportation
is not able to provide large scale services. The number of cars is increasing rapidly every year ,
meanwhile
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the lengths of the roads are still the same.
Thus
, even in developed countries like America, private
car
ownerships lead to traffics
congestion
in so many states. Even though the government of America has already built additional lanes or flyovers, they still can not overcome traffic
congestion
. Americans are still stuck in the traffic that they used to drive daily despite the lane
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already wide. In my opinion, the
car
generates more disadvantages rather than advantages.
First
is, cars produce carbon monoxide
that is
dangerous for the environment and human health. Carbon monoxide contains so many pollutants, one of them is lead. Lead can cause a respiratory problem if inhaled excessively.
Second
,
car
ownership
that can not be managed results in the development of urban sprawl where peoples tend to live far from the city centre. Urban Sprawl will generate high costs for basic utilities
such
as electricity, freshwater installation, and
transportation
infrastructure.
Third
, private
car
ownership
will change people's walking habits. Despite the disadvantages of private
car
ownership
, the are several advantages that are still useful for humankind.
Car
movement is direct and points to point. It will useful for freights
transportation
,
such
as finished goods or raw material. in conclusion, the
Car
itself will generate more disadvantages rather than its advantages. Government should provide good public
transportation
to reduce
car
ownership
.
On the other hand
, the government should restrict
the private cars
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the ownership of the private car
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ownership
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