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We cannot help everyone in the world that needs help, so we should only be concerned with our own communities and countries. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#world #communities #countries
It is true that we do have not enough ability to give everyone around the world a hand. I somewhat agree with the viewpoint because there are many
people
 who need help
besides
 us;
however
, we cannot ignore the overseas
people
 who
also
 need others’ help. The main reason why I believe
people
 should help their neighbourhood or
countries
 rather than other
countries
 is that it is the most direct approach to assist others. The public can give homeless
people
, stray dogs and alley cats food near their houses.
In addition
, teaching children and looking after elderly
people
 in rural areas are
also
 good ways to help others.
For example
, the government promote many schemes that students can help
people
 who live remotely in a systematic way.
This
 can significantly narrow the gap between urban cities and rural areas.
On the other hand
, helping other
countries
 is
also
 a worth thing that needs to be deserved. When our government give other
countries
 some health
resources
, food
resources
 and clothes
resources
 etc. It means our country is prospering so that we can assign
resources
 to them.
Nevertheless
, it builds the relationship between our country and other
countries
.
For example
, Japan experienced a huge earthquake in 2011, Taiwan was the
first
 country, which
gives
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 them big help,
such
 ​as water, food, money. Now, Japan and Taiwan maintain an excellent relationship. In conclusion,
people
 who need help exist worldwide. Even though helping other
countries
 is a friendly thing, I still believe that we need to put more attention on our communities and country
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