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Tourism has become one of the leading sources of revenue in many countries. Do the advantages of tourism outweigh the disadvantages?

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it is true that Tourism has become one of the leading sources of revenue in many countries. It is my belief that the positive effects of
this
 phenomenon certainly outweigh its disadvantages. The disadvantage of
this
 development is that the environment around the
tourist
attraction
 was destroyed by travellers because some of the tourists threw rubbish on the floor and did not follow a rule. Despite
this
, there are significant advantages it can bring to people's lives.
Firstly
, The government can get money by collecting money from attractions.
This
 is because most of the
tourist
 attractions were controlled by the government.
For example
, according to the latest research conducted by Bangkok University, it was revealed that 80% of islands in Thailand
such
 as Samui
island
, Lipe
island
 were monopolized by the government,
therefore
, everyone who went to these attractions must pay for the
island
.
In addition
 to
this
, on a wider
level
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 it may
also
 benefit developing a city surrounding the
tourist
attraction
 since
attraction
 must be progress facilities in order to support travellers. To illustrate
this
, in recent news, it has been that due to many tourists around the world come to PP
island
 every year,
consequently
,
this
tourist
attraction
 was specially developed
such
 as establish malls including the Big c, the Central, the Lotus and populations will move to
this
attraction
 in order to do a business or settle down because of
this
 situation, it will make the city more advance than before. I would ,
therefore
,argue that
although
 there are disadvantages of the current trend, they are outweighed by the advantages.
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