Some people think that zoos are cruel and should be closed down. Others, however, believe that zoos can be useful in protecting wild animals. Discuss both views and give your opinions.

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are unfair for wild

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on the other hand

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, many agree that

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can be protective for wild

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point for many children and educate them but it is very cruel for

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because they can't live freely under the constant observation of humans.

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argue that

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zoos

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are very much cruel

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because they can't survive in constant human interference and observations. Apart from that,

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are built mostly in

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and are very congested where

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can't even roam around properly and get sick instantly by staying locked in a cage or place because they are habitats to live freely in

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atmosphere and due to that reason many

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dead.

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should be moved

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wild reserved areas so that they can find themselves living in

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natural atmosphere and can survive freely without any human activities. So I

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against it to put wild

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, many

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believe that putting wild

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zoos

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are very safe for them especially for endangered

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as Asia Tigers, Pandas, etc., Where they can be taken

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by humans. Other than

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are the attraction point for many

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and educate children as well.

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, by visiting

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students get to know more about wild

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which they have only seen in the

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or books.

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, it is an earning point as well from where

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gets

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amount of money because it attracts most

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and children towards it. To sum up,

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are truly unfair for wild

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as they can be taken care of by moving them in wild reserved areas,

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I prefer to see them in videos or movies rather than seeing them locked in the cage.

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animal welfare
conservation
captive breeding
habitat
ethical issues
zoochosis
endangered species
genetic diversity
reintroduction programs
wildlife education
sanctuary
natural living conditions
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"Some university students want to learn about other subjects in addition to their main subjects. Others believe it is important to give all their time and attention to studying for a qualification

In many countries there is a problem with declining quality of air and water from both industry and construction. What measures could be taken to prevent this?