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Some people believe that purpose of education should be helping the individual to become useful for society, while others believe it should help individuals to achieve their ambitions. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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the eduction is the most essential for our life, some societies believe it helps to build their community and others in their environment.
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, others believe it is for people to achieve their aim.both groups have a reason I am going to discuss both views in
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, learning helps societies to prepare and create more people to improve their community.
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, teachers help student's who couldn't afford to study to be learned a free to help their community.
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, believed the person had
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 to increase their education to achieve their aim, in my ,opinion I am supporting the
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 group so, the societies providing the education for pupils and preparing a new generation to help their communities . In the conclusion,
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 both of the groups had aimed to achieve their education and change their perspective.

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Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.

A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • vocational training
  • professional education
  • workforce
  • informed citizens
  • critical thinking
  • civic activities
  • personal talents
  • nurture
  • innovation
  • specialize
  • personal satisfaction
  • self-awareness
  • fulfilled lives
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