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It is better for the students to live away from the home during their university studies rather than staying with their parents. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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An argument is made that
students
 should be living away from home whilst their university study, while others believe that they should remain at their parent's house. I firmly agree that they should step out and live away from their
parents
. The forthcoming paragraphs will state my ideas and justify my view.
To begin
 with, one of the main advantages of pupils living away from their
parents
 is they tend to become more mature and are able to think for themselves. They develop skills
such
 as leadership quality, maintaining relationships apart from
parents
.
This
 is because in university people come from different backgrounds and will represent different cultures, so these
students
 will learn from each other and will develop as an all-rounder, decisive character who is ready to function in
this
 world. Another reason for
students
 should live away from their homes is, they become more responsible in terms of taking decisions and how to live on a budget.
In other words
, these
students
 either live in any nearby hostels or rent a house and live as paying guests. They need to spend their money wisely on necessary things, handle both landlords and housemates.
This
 indirectly helps them to learn how to balance
then
 finance when they start earning their salary.
However
, it is not possible for every student to live away from home as some might not have enough finances to support
such
 situations, so in that case, they live with their
parents
 until they are capable of supporting themselves. To conclude, it might not be feasible for some, but living away from
parents
 during university study help them develop skills and character which will be useful for their entire life.
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • independence
  • self-reliance
  • time management
  • organizational skills
  • diverse social environments
  • broader network
  • professional contacts
  • accommodation
  • financial burden
  • emotional support
  • psychological support
  • stress
  • anxiety
  • academic pressures
  • familial support system
  • distraction
  • focused study environment
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