Buying things on the internet, such as books, air tickets, and groceries, is becoming more and more popular. Do the advantages of shopping in this way outweigh the disadvantages

Nowadays,
people
buy every necessary
things
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easily on the internet. I am positive that the
advantages
of online shopping outweigh
than
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the drawbacks. There are many ways that benefit from buying
things
on the internet.
Firstly
, online shopping saves us time and energy.
For example
, when
people
want to buy air tickets in the past, we need to go to the airline office and
purchase
it from the ticket agent officers. Today, we can easily search
from
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the
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online during our free time and
purchase
it with a click.
Moreover
, buying home
necessity
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things
from
the
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online application saves us energy to carry those back to home and money for transportation services.
This
also
helps the country to have less air pollution and traffic jams.
Furthermore
,
people
can look
the
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same items many times as
we
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wish to and think
throughly
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thoroughly
through
again and again before buying without caring what saler may think.
However
, there
is
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also
some drawbacks of doing online shopping
instead
of visiting the stores to
purchase
the items. While we make
groceries
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shopping online, we cannot know whether these are fresh or not as what we saw on the screen is just a photo. What is
more
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to learn while doing internet shopping is that the payment method
what
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we choose to use is safe enough
from
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hacking and we make the right
purchase
of the
things
we need. To
conculsion
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conclusion
, everything in the world has both
advantages
and disadvantages. As today's age becomes
technology
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world and
people
are used to
with
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using technology and become busier and busier, the
advantages
of online shopping
becomes
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more convenient to
people
and
brings
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more
advantages
to us.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • convenience
  • time-saving
  • wide selection
  • competitive prices
  • discounts
  • accessibility
  • global marketplace
  • availability
  • fraud
  • scams
  • lack of
  • physical interaction
  • personal experience
  • impersonal
  • customer service
  • delays
  • delivery
  • return process
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