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Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals.Others say that there are more important enviromental problems.

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The line chart shows average carbon dioxide
emissions
 per
persom
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person
 in four countries from 1967 to 2007. According to the date, the year between 1967 and 2007 saw a drop in the
emissions
 of the English. It can be noticed in1977 the
emissions
 reached the top in Sweden, and
afterb
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after
 that the average
emissions
 had decreased year by year.
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 Italy and Portugal follow the same trend, in 1967 the figures were about 1.8 and 4.1 metric tonnes, rising to about 5.8 and 7.9 respectively in 2007. In 1967 English was the highest in four countries whose
emossions
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emissions
emotions
 was about amazing 10.8 per person,
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second
 Sweden was about 8.5,
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came
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 Italy and Portugal. But in 1987, with the rose of Italy, and the decrease of Sweden their lines intersected. At
last
 in 2007,
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falling Italy intersected
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rising Portugal in about 5.8 metric tonnes and
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 Kingdom was
also
 falling
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 Italy.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • biodiversity
  • extinction
  • habitat loss
  • ecosystem
  • food chain
  • imbalance
  • interconnected
  • climate change
  • pollution
  • personal actions
  • policy changes
  • education
  • awareness
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