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In many countries, paying for things using mobile phones apps is becoming increasingly common. does this development have more advantages or more disadvantages?

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A growing number of people in many countries Plaza premium on using mobile phone
applications
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 for paying.
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 there are a number of drawbacks involved in
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 trend, the benefits occurring to using apps are by no means negligible. To commence with the benefits, increasing the usage of payment
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 is very environmentally friendly. To put it differently, not using paper-based money anymore will decrease deforestation thereby improving the air quality and being more eco-friendly. Take purchasing everyday goods by Amazon application and paying for our orders are through Internet as a salient example; The one that only could order anything they want from their house but
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 could pay it without needing cash. having said that,
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, the downside of using
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 for paying should not be underestimated. Many people may have difficulties adapting to new technologies and trends especially, seniors. Simply put, older people are not familiar with state-of-the-art devices, websites or apps and getting to know them may be hard for them. A good illustration of
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 is a 90-year-old grandfather who lives alone and has no idea about cutting-edge gadgets so he's more likely to feel left out while shopping with cash. to conclude, the tendency of using
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 rather than money or credit card can be both rewarding and problematic,
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, I reckon that the advantages outweigh the disadvantages. While
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 might help the earth to be cleaner and fresher, the Elderly's life may be put in jeopardy as they are not able to overshadow technology as fast as youngsters.
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