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More and more parents are allowing children to play on computers and tablets as they think that children should learn technology skills.

#parents #children #computers #tablets #technology #skills
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Due to the technological developments, today’s parents tend to allow their
children
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 to
use
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 technological
devices
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such
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 as laptops, tablets, and mobile phones in order to learn skills of technology. In the following paragraphs, both advantages and disadvantages will be discussed. On the one hand,
children
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 playing on computers and tablets tend to have more technical skills than
children
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 who spend time on other things.
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 is because
people
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 in the future are more likely to
use
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 technological
devices
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 to communicate with others than in the past.
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, young
people
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 who usually
use
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 these
devices
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 can be more familiar and learn knowledge from them earlier.
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,
children
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 can
use
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 these technological
devices
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 to find their abilities and their likes by watching and learning positive issues from the Internet.
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, consuming too much on technological tools can be drawbacks for young
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. Since their parents cannot control all of the contents posted on the Internet in which some are sensitive and violent for their
children
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. For
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 reason,
children
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 can be seduced and persuaded into the wrong ways.
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, young
people
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 can be addicted to playing too much on computers, which can lead to inappropriate behaviour and negative results.
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, my cousin is addicted to computer games, playing around 8-9 hours a day
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 of reading books;
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, he failed in his examination and cannot pass to the
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 level of study. In conclusion, even though there are some positives in technological developments, some negatives can be dangerous and harmful for young
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.
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, both father and mother should limit time and control information for their
children
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 on playing on computers.
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